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sleep with “daki kago”, part 2

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Yosa Buson:

sleep with “daki kago”!
as with a one-night harlot at Fushimi
exchanging lovers’ talks.

Chèvrefeuille:

sleeping alone
the spring breeze
comforts me

Response:

Spider gently sways
Asleep with daki kago
Trapped moth’s good night kiss

I loved this challenge. After putting together sleep with “daki kago”, part 1, I could not get Chèvrefeuille’s example above out of my head. My mind kept seeing the basket weave of the daki kago similar to a spider’s web. So here is my second attempt. Again, I seem to have a darker, survivalist spin to mine or perhaps I was just hungry…….

In response to CARPE DIEM HAIKU KAI: Carpe Diem My Favorite Haiku By … #4 Buson’s sleep with “daki kago”

Author: Dancing Echoes

I am a scientist by trade and artist by soul. My creative outlet used to be dancing but due to injuries and age, I must now find another path. I am hoping my writing, poetry and photography can be this new path. Awards: While I am grateful and honored for the numerous nominations, I don’t have time to respond to them with the attention they deserve, so for the most part, I am an award free blog. All photographs and words are mine unless otherwise credited. © 2015-2023 Dancing Echoes ALL RIGHTS RESERVED Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this blog’s author/owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Christy Draper with appropriate and specific direction to the original content on Dancing Echoes.

3 thoughts on “sleep with “daki kago”, part 2”

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  1. magicalmysticalteacher
    September 25, 2015 at 12:56 pm

    A kiss of death, naturally! 😉

    Moon Blossoming

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  2. Forest Pirate
    September 25, 2015 at 11:33 pm

    Ah scrumptious! That deadly kiss, so symbolic! …A real metaphor there…..one knows, yet one always succumbs. Great haiku, made me really chuckle, though only because it is to close to the bone, and I, too attracted to the flame just like your trapped moth.

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  3. Dancing Echoes
    September 25, 2015 at 11:48 pm

    Thank you for your kind words!

    Like

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